I open my eyes to see the windshield disintegrating and shattering into rays before me. I tense up as I hold onto the steering wheel, fighting the force gravity has pressed upon me. I come to a stop at the edge of a swollen stream and gas fumes fill my nostrils as I work the seatbelt to get free. My surroundings start to fade and I’m awakened by two hands that grip me hard, pulling me from the wreckage.
“Are you seriously hurt?”
“I don’t think so.”
“Well, you are under arrest for stealing the car and running from police.”
Nice! You did a great job of setting a scene and creating a very suspenseful storyline, @foragingquietude. You also incorporated a great last line that adds a nice twist.
I suggest one edit. I think you want to say "I'm awakened" in the fourth sentence. I can see why you would go with present tense, since your story is told in present tense, but "awakened" is correct.
Ah yes. I agree it should be "awakened". I'll get that changed. Thanks @jayna!
Love it. Great twist at the end.
Thanks @pyemoney!
nice story will be making mine soon. It could have been I was awakened by two hands But maybe because of the word count. It is hard I had to keep on checking mine and changing just to get 100 words only
Thanks @purpledaisy57. This was my first attempt at micro fiction.