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RE: 50 Word Micro-Fiction Competition – Win SBI Shares

in #contest6 years ago (edited)

All Out

Miriam's refrigerator was empty and the last nonperishables were gone.

Calling her son got only that blasted answer machine. Again.

"John, I'm out of food. How dare you neglect me? You always were a worthless boy."

She stared out the window, banging her rickety cane into her aching knees.


Thanks for the prompt!

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This is such a great bit of fiction- and those few words feed so much back about Miriam... her negative attitude, how she has always put John down. Sure, she should be a figure of pity, but you've skilfully lead me to see her as her own worst enemy and the villain of the piece in some way.

Thanks so much for your entry.
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