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RE: The park. Finish the Story Contest - Week #59

in #finishthestory5 years ago

@maparari you always, always surprise me, in our rounds dripping in horror, creepiness and suspense, you provide a pool of laughter and light heartedness, and in a round asking for just that, i did not expect this ending.

You had me hooked, I adored the mammoth costume and the dance, i could picture Carl whole-heartedly singing it, and John cringing in the costume unable to do anything about it. It is such a fun image, and then the little girl getting on! But then oh my, I did not see that coming, the sheer humiliation, the poor overweight woman, Carl trying his best to catch her, but only managing her dress - dropped in her underwear and to be laughed at by the whole park. I couldn't help but feel for her, even if she hadn't realized the mammoth wasn't actually a ride she could demand to go on - and was rude and entitled about it, to be accidentally stripped to her knickers in front of a crowd, her weight exaggerated by her rolling, I hurt for her! It's so well written, you had me there for the whole thing! You never disappoint, and I love how in this, you show both sides of fun, and comedy <3