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RE: Ten minute writing throw-down: Refrigerator door

Dude i teared up reading this. Very well written. Many parts of the story either hit home or are things that happened to a friend of mine.

One friend was in a Bradly in Iraq. He gad just switched seats with another team member because he was taller and the seat was more comfortable. A minute later he heard a bang and remembered nothing. He woke up in Germany the next thing he knew. He had been in a coma for a month. He was the only one who survived the IED because of where he sat once he gad switched seats. To this day he wonders why he survived and why they were taken. It haunts him.

The father to the son. I have that same sense of commitment and love the father has for his son. I made a promise to myself that i would always be there for a certain little boy. And now through no fault of my own i cant keep that promise now that my relationship with his mother is over. So i know the pain in that aspect of the story. I like how you left it on an up note. Never give up. A pact between father and son. I liked that.

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Thanks mate, I appreciate your kind words. I wasn't sure where this would go. I planned it in my head and smashed it out in a little over ten minutes then proof read it. It came out ok. With more time I would have elaborated on the emotion but I didn't have the time.

I've lost mates to PTSD over the years so that's why I added that but, out of respect to them, and I wanted to end it on an up as that's what I'd like my mates to feel in real life; That there is an option, life doesn't have to be so dark.

The father son thing...I'll never be a father so I won't feel it, maybe that's where it came from? I'm a son though, and despite recently losing my dad he'll always be my dad. So, that's where that sort of originated. I could have gone anywhere with this...I mean most have piles of images on the fridge door right? I know I do. I chose to take it down this path through, I liked the emotional and personal nature of it.

Clearly the dad/son part hits close to home for you, and I'm not surprised, as an American, that you have known mates who experienced similar wartime events. IED's are deadly, one is at the mercy of fate where they concerned mostly.

I'm glad you liked it man, I was hoping someone did.

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