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RE: Friday night poet - Lulls

in The LIFESTYLE LOUNGE4 years ago

I love the voice and cadence of this poem, @tarazkp. The pleasant lilting quality is incongruent with its message, in a really interesting way.

Continually serving and continual swerving
to avoid the gavel of the trusted.
As they lie and steal for their every meal
Under the guise of the deserving.

The rhyming of the first and fourth lines is brilliant. Well done.

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Thanks :) I don't know about any of the structure of creative writing, I just write. Sometimes I wonder if it is better that way, rather than trying to fit into what they teach at a school about the way it is supposed to be done.

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