A Lost Soul In The Fire

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It has been a month of planning and we are finally here. We planned to visit that cafe at the top of the mountain which is the trending attraction nowadays. Since it is on the top of the mountain, it involves a little bit of hiking which may take an hour or so before we could get there. It's stressful at work these days, so my friends and I went for a change of pace with a little bit of refreshment. We saw a lot of reviews on the internet that the scenery from above where the Cafe lies is absolutely stunning. The reviews are all positive and a lot are saying that it is worth the trip.

Early in the morning, at 5 am, we went to the terminal wherein we hired a van to give us a ride to the foot of that mountain. It was a long journey of about an hour. When we get there, the sun is already rising. We hurried because it would be hotter if we stayed for long at the bottom.

A few minutes after non-stop hiking, I felt that nature was calling. I told them that I have to pee and they told me to go to the back of a large tree at the distance.

"Just go, we'll wait for you here," Jeff told me as he took my backpack from my shoulders.

"Thanks. Just a minute," I ran to that tree as I said it. After I'm done with my business, I go back to where they are. Yet when I returned, I'm stunned to see them nowhere and the footpath was empty.

I searched my eyes around the area to check where they were but I couldn't find them. They couldn't possibly play a prank on me, right? They know very well that I'm not good with hiking. What will I do in the middle of the wild, surrounded by lofty trees? I'm praying that there won't be any wild animals here to come and attack me.

Our destination is going up since the Cafe is at the peak of this mountain. I just keep on walking upwards following the narrow path. The slope of the mountain was so steep that it made my knees weary after a few minutes. I don't know how many minutes have passed since I didn't have my phone with me. They said that it would take us more than an hour to get there but summing it all up, since we started at the mountain's foot, it's probably already an hour.

But… It looks like I'm still in the middle of the forest. Am I lost now?

The thought itself can freak me out but I'm trying to keep myself calm. I'm panting and so thirsty but my backpack where I have my water isn't with me. I saw a rock beside the path and I decided to rest for a while. I sit on it while catching my breath and wiping my sweat with my hand.

I saw an old woman coming and she was walking hurriedly upwards. When she was walking past me, I called out to her.

"Excuse me, Ma'am. Can you help me? Can I ask which path leads to the cafe at the top of the mountain?"

She didn't even turn her head to look at me but just continued walking upwards. She totally ignored me as she doubled her steps leaving me behind. Then, I was thinking maybe she just didn't hear me and she was also going up there, too. I followed her path but I was more shocked that she can walk faster than me with her old age. In the end, I lost sight of her when she took a turn in the distance.

I just continued walking until I reached a hut in the distance. This hut wouldn't possibly be the cafe judging from what it looks like, and the picture on the internet is totally different. The door and the windows are wide open and it looks like there is no sign of someone living there since there are a lot of dried leaves inside. I can't explain that feeling but something is pushing me to go inside. Before I knew it, I was already standing in front of a framed picture on the wall. I found it familiar, then realized that it is the old woman that I met earlier.

A fire blasted surrounding the picture and it rapidly burned the wall. I trembled at the sight and was too stunned to take a step. The fire reached the roof and surrounded the whole house. Mustering all the courage I still have, I ran to the door and continued running outside without knowing where to go.

"Hey, Anne! There you are! Where have you been?" As I saw him and the others in the distance, and heard his voice, I ran faster and lost my balance, then fell in front of him. With him helping me to stand, I took a deep breath.

"Fire! Jeff, there's a fire! The hut is on fire!" I told him panicking.

"Where?" He asked.

"There!" I turned around and pointed to the hut but there was no fire in it. Only blackened woods which is evidence that there was a fire long ago. Dried leaves covered the floor of its ruins and there is no ashes, no portrait, and no embers.

"Oh, that Hut. It was my grandmother's. It was an unfortunate event. She might have forgotten that she was cooking something in the kitchen and left it, then went to sleep. She died there in the fire. It was late before we knew it," said the man who stopped with us, shaking his head while regretfully looking at the Hut's direction.

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is it just an illusion? The spirit takes you to the past and shows you a terrible event. It's an interesting story.

It's not an illusion. It's more like she is gifted with that sight or something.

What a gripping story, well done 🙌 I wonder why the past was revealed to her, instead of the grandson?

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It's because she is gifted with the special sight. Hihi.

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So yung grandma yung nakita na hndi lumingon. Galing

Nakita niya naman yung mukha nung papunta pa lang, hindi lang siya nilingon. Ahaha.

@ayane-chan Anne saw Jeff's dead grandmother on the hills way, and then she took him to the place of her death, perhaps a sign of the spirit. These people should revisit that fired hut to see what the grandmother wanted to say.

In my story, the grandmother died while sleeping when a fire broke out, perhaps her soul didn't know that she is dead yet. In our place here, if somwthing like this happened, we will gather to that haunted place and pray for the soul to find its peace and way to where would they go next in the afterlife.

This story gripped my senses and got me thinking of unfortunate events. In that moment, I think she went into a different dimension. That of souls. I'm glad she came back though. Well done.

Well, yeah, something like that. Thanks for reading my story and I'm grateful that you liked it.

This is a very compelling and readable story, @ayane-chan. The mystery keeps the story moving, and we must read to the end to find out what's really going on. It is resolved well, and in a way that let's us know the old woman on the path was no ordinary woman. Well done!

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I really enjoyed this story, @ayane-chan. That would pretty much be my worst nightmare - being lost and disoriented in the woods with everyone having disappeared! Not to mention the eerie cabin and the fire. Great read!

If I'm on my character's situation, I might even faint. Haha. Though I can write something like this, I'm pretty much a scaredy cat myself. 😂

I enjoyed your short story @ayane-chan! I didn't know you could write so well.
I was so excited to read until the end.
I even thought this was a horror story.

I'm also writing stories in read.cash, so I'm glad that I found a story writing community like this in here.

Nice! I hope you'll continue to get inspired writing stories.

Oh wow! Could she have a seer's gift? That was scary as much as it was interesting. Now, I want to know what happens from there😂. You awoke my story appetite.
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She might have that. Hihi. But based on folklores here in our place, once a spirit showed up to people, then they might have an unfinished business. In my story, the grandmother died while sleeping when the fire broke out, so she might not know that she is already dead; that's why her soul is still wandering around her hut.

Oh that makes sense...❤️

Scary interesting tale. ❤️🤗🤗💕
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Thanks for reading. I appreciate seeing you here.

It's a nice tour but getting lost and seeing others leaving you behind is something else. Sometimes we need to remember that we have people around us who does not know where to go from where to are. We don't need to be in haste instead take them with us for them to be directed.

This story is just like someone who lost in the jungle but found his way back by chance.

You have made use of the tenses so well and constructed the write up to follow the prompt word.
Well done ....and kudos to you....it's just like an adventure...

@dreemport sent me here...

I think it would surely be scary for anyone to be lost in the middle of the wild.

Anyway, thanks for being here.

That was a frightening experience the realisation of what she really saw. I guess the other woman going faster is the dead one still hurrying to turn off the fire for the food on the kitchen.

Well done, nice story.

I'll leave it to your imagination. Thanks for reading. 😄

Yes, the reader imagination use to be plenty, we should always exploit that.

At first I thought might be it would would be the future of Anne. Might be she would be left on the mountains for the whole life and that old lady would be her who survived alone .

But you twisted the story in unique way by leaving the questions that she visited the past event which happened to redirect her or to tell her any reality. Nicely done dear .

When you are blessed with such a gift, sometimes they say a lost soul is powerful, but all they want is peace. Hayst, maybe there was something more that happened, not the kitchen but some culprit 😲

Kayo na bahala mag-isip ng ibang possibilities. Haha. Next prompt ulit.