Common Ground

in The Ink Well11 months ago

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Nneka and Emeka sat on the veranda of his cozy apartment in the heart of Enugu. The gentle breeze rustled through the flowers, carrying the scent of hibiscus into the air. The fading sun cast a warm, golden hue over the surroundings, creating an ambiance that seemed almost poetic. Emeka cleared his throat, glancing at Nneka with a mix of apprehension and love in his eyes.
"Nneka, I can't ignore this anymore. Our dreams and aspirations are pulling us in different directions."
He said, his voice filled with a mix of vulnerability and determination. Nneka gazed at Emeka with sadness in her eyes, her ebony skin glowing in the evening light. She could sense the seriousness in his tone, and her heart skipped a beat. She gripped his fingers, squeezing them gently. Emeka looked down at his squeezed fingers, his jaw clenched, struggling to find the right words.
"I know we've always had different ambitions, but I thought love could bridge the gap. Can't we find a way to support each other?
Nneka sighed, her gaze fixed on their interlocked fingers.
"It's not that simple, Emeka. I want to study medicine, become a doctor, and serve my community, but you're drawn to the allure of entrepreneurship and the corporate world. Our paths are diverging, and it's straining our relationship."
Emeka reached out and gently brushed a strand of Nneka's braided hair behind her ear."I love you, Nneka. And I want to be with you, but I can't give up my dreams either. I want to create jobs and build a better future for our people."
Tears welled up in Nneka's eyes as she felt the weight of their conflicting aspirations.
"I don't want either of us to compromise, Emeka. We deserve to pursue our passions fully. Maybe we should consider going our separate ways."
Emeka's heart sank at the thought of losing Nneka. He held her chin gently, raising her face.
"Nneka, I can't imagine a life without you. But we can’t let go of our dreams either. Let's take a step back and think about what's truly important to us."

"Days turned into weeks; Emeka and Nneka sought advice from mentors, attended seminars, and explored possibilities that could merge their passions. One evening, while strolling hand in hand along the banks of the Nike lake, a revelation struck Nneka. "Emeka, what if we create a medical technology start-up? We could merge our worlds, using technology to enhance healthcare and bridge the gap between medicine and entrepreneurship."
Emeka's eyes lit up, and his heart raced with excitement.
"Yes, Nneka! It's a perfect synergy. Let's create a partnership. You pursue your medical studies, and I'll start a social enterprise focused on healthcare innovation. We can develop innovative solutions, improve healthcare accessibility, and empower our community. Together, we can make a meaningful impact in our communities, and our love will be the foundation that sustains us" he said, his voice filled with newfound clarity.

They both realized that they could support each other while pursuing their passions. They didn't have to choose between love and their dreams. Emeka took a deep breath, while Nneka’s eyes widened with hope. Tears of joy streamed down Nneka's cheeks as she embraced Emeka, the salty breeze mingling with their love. "Emeka, my love, let's build a future where our dreams intertwine, where love and purpose coexist."
And so, Nneka and Emeka forged a path forward—a path that celebrated their individual ambitions while nurturing their love, their business plans, reaching out to investors, and immersed themselves in the world of healthcare entrepreneurship. They became unstoppable force and champions for each other's dreams. In the embrace of their shared vision, their love story flourished, weaving itself into the fabric of their lives.

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What a nice idea they brought into reality!
Seeing that the both were keenly after goals, their relationship wouldn't have worked if they didn't combined love and goals.

Nice story

Thanks for reading.

Your story has a clear conflict and a very nice resolution, @onyirichicarton. That is something we always look for in a good story.

We have a tip for you. When you write a story, it's best to pick your main character, or "MC." The MC is the one whose eyes we see through as the story progresses. (This is called the point of view, or "POV.") We understand that character's motivations, desires, and challenges. Without establishing who the MC of the story is, your readers don't know which character to care about most. And this leads to a less engaging and compelling experience with the story.

Here's an example, where the POV changes between the characters, so we don't know if this is Nneka's story or Emeka's story.

Nneka gazed at Emeka with sadness in her eyes, her ebony skin glowing in the evening light. She could sense the seriousness in his tone, and her heart skipped a beat. She gripped his fingers, squeezing them gently. Emeka looked down at his squeezed fingers, his jaw clenched, struggling to find the right words.

When Nneka gazes at Emeka, the reader will naturally assume that she is the MC, and we will see the story from her POV. However, we are told she has "sadness in her eyes" and that her ebony skin glows, and those are only things that Emeka would observe. Then in the next sentence "She could sense" tells us that this is Nneka's point of view. However, the very next sentence says Emeka looked down and struggled to find the right words, so we are back again to his point of view.

Hopefully these are helpful tips that support you on your writing journey! Thank you for sharing your story in The Ink Well and for reading and commenting on the work of other community members.

Thanks for the helpful tips. I appreciate your kindness.

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Sometimes, we need to think about something. And so believe in revelation too.

This is so believable. For as relationship to work, the partners need to work on personal and collective interests. Respecting this would definitely make it work.

It made a nice read. Well done.