IELTSwith me: Writing P2 - Having a long-term commitment to a job or being a job changer?

It's me again with the series IELTS with me. Today I continue to write about topic "Job" and this is also the last post of this topic.

I'm struggling with shortening my post. The ideal length of an essay in Writing Task 2 should be 270-280 words only as there is just 40 minutes to write. However, I have never made it. My essays are always around 330-360 words which are too long and I may not be able to make it when taking a real test due to the limitation of time.

Hope that next posts I will be better at making it short.

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Having a long-term commitment to a job or being a job changer?
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Topic: Some people think that people who choose a job early and keep doing it are more likely to get a satisfying career life than those who frequently change jobs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People believe that it is easier to gain satisfaction in a career for those who committed to a job for a long period of time, which seems unachievable with frequent job changers. I personally do not agree with that. I think both can bring people contentment in different ways, but a fulfilled career is not entirely determined by the length of time people staying in a job.

It is undeniable that entering a profession early and continue working in it for a long time is beneficial. For example, while others are struggling to figure out what they will do for living, it is probably a head start for someone who manages quickly to determine their choice of occupation. Additionally, a long-term commitment to a job, which is highly appreciated in most companies, will help them to develop their expertise in their field so that they can climb up the career ladder. If the ultimate goal of someone is to be promoted and successful in a particular profession, then the longer the tenure is, the more likely his contentment will be met.

On the other hand, there are many advantages for job changers, too. When people are still young and lack experience, it is too early and difficult for them to make a decision on their career, thus, switching jobs may help to find out what is the most suitable path for them. And by doing so, people can have a larger network as well as a wide range of experience. For those who love to challenge and refresh themselves incessantly, staying in one profession for so long can be tedious and job-hopping is apparently the best way for them to stay satisfied.

In conclusion, the definition of career satisfaction varies from person to person, and sometimes, it has nothing to do with the amount of time people have devoted themselves to a job. In fact, it depends mostly on how much the job lives up to their expectation. So, switching jobs frequently or committing to one job only, as long as all the things they have ever wanted in a job are fulfilled, they will be satisfied.

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Total word count: 357

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I have read this model answer for reference and actually learnt some word choices from it. Link:https://ielts-share.com/bai-mau-ielts-writing-band-8-va-tu-vung-chu-de-jobs/