Love..... How long is too long?

in #steemit7 years ago (edited)

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Everything fades
Yes, even gold rusts.
Life turns to death
And age eats into us.

Let the wind howl,
let the sun breathe down fire
and the seasons come and go.
It doesn't matter what happens
Because my love for you would never die.
It's Fervent and strong like an Aboki's thread.

Let me know, Did I miss my chance?
I'm curious and my worry makes me ask.
Angel, how long is too long for you?

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I feel your poem lacks rhythm. Not like I'm a good poet myself, it's no expert opinion. Just a random night thought.

read through it again.
Pay attention to the punctuations and you will start to feel the rhythm
Tell me if you do.