That was very good. I do wish the ending its self wasnt so abrupt. It seemed to hollywoodish. All but the last paragraph was excellent and very descriptive. I hope that doesn't come off to brash.
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That was very good. I do wish the ending its self wasnt so abrupt. It seemed to hollywoodish. All but the last paragraph was excellent and very descriptive. I hope that doesn't come off to brash.
Don't worry, constructive criticism is something I really like. Makes me a better writer. I'm glad you liked the rest! Thank you for being honest :)