Lulls
The edges are torn and the mind worn
like a glove that just doesn't fit.
Gripping the heart and slipping the start
To disappear into the the storm.
Light flickers flee past eyes that can't see
and into the darkness they wander.
To disappear through crack with no way back
Tied to forever and never free.
Once there was a time to enjoy the sublime
and thoughts that it was perfection.
Til the lines appear and open minds fear
Owned by the collective crime.
Continually serving and continual swerving
to avoid the gavel of the trusted.
As they lie and steal for their every meal
Under the guise of the deserving.
The quietness holds as they create the molds
into all shape and form must squeeze.
The guilty turn sails as the silence prevails
and the voices are drowned in the folds.
The rains come and go and sun turns to snow
and the wind blows until out of breath.
Those lulled to become those who were culled
Become those who arise from below.
I love the voice and cadence of this poem, @tarazkp. The pleasant lilting quality is incongruent with its message, in a really interesting way.
The rhyming of the first and fourth lines is brilliant. Well done.
Thanks :) I don't know about any of the structure of creative writing, I just write. Sometimes I wonder if it is better that way, rather than trying to fit into what they teach at a school about the way it is supposed to be done.
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ENGAGEtokens.now thats not bad at all. A nive little poem to ponder with my morning coffee. Thanks for that
It is nice to deliver something people spend a little energy thinking about. :)
exactly. When someone comments on something I've posted it's somehow satisfying to know they read it, digested it, thought about it and then commented about it. So it's had some sort of impact. Your poem kind of completed my morning coffee time very nively. I'd just done my morning coffee post and then saw that on my following feed. perfect. Now at work in a nice frame of mind
I wonder what the difference would be for a career if with all other things remaining equal, a person had a nice frame of mind on average or a bad.
depends on the career I reckon. Corporate business is ruthless and being bad minded seems to be rewarded. I've found in my trade being in a cool state of mind means I keep a great vibe in the dive shop and the guests either come back all the time because of it or tell their friends to come see us. For me its key to how I choose to do things at the shop. I have to pretend less and can be way more natural and have more energy to give
Bad behavior, but perhaps a positive mind for bad behavior would help make the behavior worse :D
For you for sure, an easy going nature and friendly disposition is a huge plus. Can you imagine a first time diver coming in and meeting with a neurotic and tense instructor?
I have a few dive instructor friends back in Cairns and they all seem to have a similar "beach attitude"
I like people in my dive shop to feel right at home. I border line abuse the regulars cos they love it as it makes them feel comfortable as its how friends are with each other. It's worked for me very well. Be as natuaral as possible and pay attention to people as people. It's what I want when i go places
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ENGAGEtokens.cheers buddy
I remember the events of your last weeks and I think that calm should be an ideal state for you, to which you aspire, not only with the days but with the circumstances. Imagine yourself as that ship that lies still despite the storms. A very beautiful poem. I'm reading it today, Saturday, and it's good, too. Greetings, @tarazkp