A smashing job, as you pull us into the sinkhole with you. Action. Wow, there is action and drama. You took the cue and ran with it.
Great job. Great arc. Please remember to link this to the prompt post so it is not overlooked when we do our review.
Thank you for sharing this remarkable story with us. And, also we know you engage with other authors because you recognize how valuable that feedback is to a writer.
Will engage more today, been asleep and off screen these last 12 odd hours and won't be on much til later this arvo.
I hoped I nailed the action okay! It was fun to write. I love how you can have a character doing nothing but lying there having code fed to her yet still there's something dramatic happening! I wanted to convey that sense of movement toward the sinkhole and the teetering dizziness she felt as she changed from nanny to war machine. Thanks!